Cut a rambling STAR answer down to ninety seconds

I am preparing an answer to this behavioral question:

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Here is my draft answer:

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Edit it into a spoken answer of about 90 seconds (roughly 200 to 230 words). Rules:
- Use only facts I gave. If the result has no number, leave a placeholder like [metric] and tell me what number to go find.
- Keep the structure situation, task, action, result, but spend most of the words on action.
- Every action sentence must have "I" as the subject. Mark each place where my draft said "we" and you could not tell what I personally did.
- Cut background the interviewer does not need to understand the decision.
- End with one sentence on what I would do differently or what I learned, only if my draft contained one.

Return the edited answer, then a list of the cuts you made and why, then the two follow-up questions an interviewer is most likely to ask after this answer.